Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

in this graph shows the numbers of visitors who visit the first and return /second time in caryl island in the years of 200 to 2008. the first time visitor shows in this line graph is blue and the returns visitors shows the red line and the y-axis shows the numbers of visitors.

this graph also discuss how many visitors are visits first time and the will came back to visit island in 2000 to 2008.firstly i discuss the first time visitors how visit caryl island in the years 2000 its about 8000 people visit then in 2002 will decrease the visitor people its about 4000. In the year 2002 to 2008 has tend to be increase the visitors people and the range of 4000 to 12000 approximately.the visitors enjoyed a lots in the first time and the came back to explore more caryl island city of the Euroup country. finally i discuss about returns visitors which tend to be increase in 2000 to to 2006 approximately. In the year of 2000 people visit again its about 3000 people and its continusely increase visitors how visit every years at the end of 2006 . After 2006 people are decrease to visit the Island Caryl 15000 to 13000 in the years of 2008. first time visitors are less then the return visitors.

in conclusion i will discuss about the visitors who visits first time is lesss then to the returns visitors. the main feature is that first time visitors and the returns vistors has tend to be increase.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by identifying the main trends for both visitor types. However, the analysis is hampered by inaccurate data reporting (e.g., stating 15,000 to 13,000 for 2008 when the graph shows different figures). The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the inclusion of subjective commentary—such as 'the visitors enjoyed a lots'—is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires objective data description. To improve, focus on accurately transcribing the data points and ensuring the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than providing a chronological narrative of every year.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'firstly', 'finally', and 'in conclusion'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences is often abrupt. The lack of sophisticated linking words makes the text feel disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'visitors'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the will came back to visit island' and 'Euroup country'. Some phrasing is non-standard, which occasionally makes the meaning difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a significant rise', and ensure correct spelling of basic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the first time visitor shows'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are largely simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede clarity, such as 'the visitors enjoyed a lots in the first time and the came back to explore'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and misused commas. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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