Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph illustrate the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island between 2000 to 2008.

Overall, returning visitors were increased significantly and remained higher that first-time visitors from 2002 onwards. In contrast, firs-time visitors fell at the beginning of the period before rising steadily until 2008.

First-time visitors were highest one in early 2000 around 8000 people, but slightly fell at 4000 in 2002, while returning visitors have increased sharply in between 2000 to 2002 at 2500 to 10000 people. Followed by first-time visitors seen gradually increase in 2004 at 6000 people and in that period around 2004 returning visitors have little stable at 12000.

Meanwhile after 2004 first-time visitors experienced surged in between 2006 to 2008 at 12000 people, but after a 2004 returning visitors also skyrocketed in 2006 and got his peak around 14500 before falling 12500 in 2008.

Although the gap between the two groups narrowed in 2008, returning visitors still outnumbered first-time visitors overall.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all requirements of the task. You have successfully identified the main trends and provided data points to support your descriptions. The overview clearly highlights the contrasting trends between the two visitor types. However, some of the data reporting is slightly imprecise, such as stating 'returning visitors have increased sharply in between 2000 to 2002 at 2500 to 10000 people' which is a bit clunky. To reach a higher band, ensure that the data points are integrated more smoothly into the narrative and that the comparisons are more explicitly linked to the overall trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast', 'Meanwhile', and 'Although', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'in that period around 2004 returning visitors have little stable'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus will help improve the overall cohesion of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'skyrocketed', 'surged', and 'outnumbered' effectively. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'returning visitors have little stable' (should be 'remained relatively stable') and 'first-time visitors were highest one' (should be 'the highest'). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses (e.g., 'The line graph illustrate' instead of 'illustrates') and subject-verb agreement. There are also issues with prepositions and articles, such as 'fell at 4000 in 2002' and 'after a 2004'. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Pay closer attention to proofreading your work for basic tense consistency and article usage.

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