Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

First we will talk about the first time visitors in 2000 the number of first time visitor in 2000 is 8000 which is good on the other hand we can see the returning visitors in 2000 and there number is around 2000 to 4000. Then we can see the downfall number of first time visitor in 2002 are 4000 and on the other hand the number of returning visitors are 10000. Now we can see the timeline of 2006 the number of first time visitors are 8000 which is a better progress then last 2 years, on the other hand the number of returning visitors is between 14000 to 16000 which is good. Now we will see the last year of the graph 2008 here we can see the number of first time visitors are 12000 which is good progress in last 4 years

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While the main features of the graph are identified, the report lacks an overview or summary of the trends, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. The information is presented as a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary, and the analysis is somewhat superficial. To improve, you must include an introductory sentence that paraphrases the prompt, a clear overview paragraph highlighting the main trends, and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to fully develop the comparison of data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. The text is presented as a single block, and the progression of ideas is mechanical. You rely heavily on repetitive transition phrases like 'on the other hand' and 'now we can see'. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs (Introduction, Overview, and Body Paragraphs). Use a wider variety of cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'meanwhile', 'subsequently', or 'whereas' to link your ideas more naturally and improve the logical flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'the number of' and 'which is good'. There is little attempt to use academic vocabulary or synonyms to describe trends (e.g., 'increase', 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak'). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise language to describe data, such as 'witnessed a significant rise', 'remained stable', or 'reached a peak of'. Avoid using informal or subjective language like 'which is good' or 'which is a better progress', as these are not appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response consists primarily of simple sentence structures. There is a lack of complex grammatical forms, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, which are necessary for higher band scores. You also have frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of first time visitor in 2000 is 8000') and punctuation, as the entire text is essentially one long run-on sentence. To improve, focus on using a mix of simple and complex sentences and ensure that your verbs agree with the subjects. Proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization will also significantly improve clarity.

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