Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The bar chart illustrates the amount of people who were visiting for the first time and the returning travelers from the Caryl Island between the year 2000 and 2008.
Overall, it is evident that, the figure of visitors who were returning from Caryl Island fluctuated over a span of 8 years. Whereas, the number of travelers visiting for the first time gradually increased after the year 2002.
To begin with , 8000 people were travelling for the first time in the year 2000, which showed a downward trend with less than 5000 first time visitors in 2002. Moreover, it experienced an upward trend and represented gradual rise from 4000 people visiting per annum to more than 11,000 visitors in the year 2008.
Subsequently, the returning visitors accounted for constant fluctuations over the 8 years of time period. Moreover, the populate who were returning from Caryl Island were less than 3000 in the year 2008. Whereas, it rose to 10,000 people returning annually in the year 2002. Furthermore, the number of people leaving the Caryl Island recorded its highest in the year 2006 with more than 14,000 returning individuals. Finally, it accounted for marginal decline in the year 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers the main features of the graph well, identifying key trends for both visitor categories. The overview is clear and highlights the contrasting patterns between the two groups. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, the text mentions 'less than 3000' returning visitors in 2008, whereas the graph shows a higher figure. Additionally, the description of the returning visitors' trend is slightly confusing, as the text refers to them as 'people leaving the Caryl Island', which misinterprets the data labels. Despite these minor inaccuracies, the main trends are successfully identified and compared.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Subsequently' are used to link ideas, although some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The progression of information is generally clear, moving from the first-time visitors to the returning visitors. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two distinct data sets, which helps the reader follow the analysis. Overall, the structure is sound and supports the development of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with attempts to use descriptive language like 'fluctuated', 'downward trend', and 'marginal decline'. However, there are some awkward word choices, such as 'the populate' (instead of 'the population' or 'the number of people') and 'returning from Caryl Island' (which implies they are leaving, rather than visiting). These inaccuracies do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of the report. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise nouns and collocations related to data description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the amount of people' (should be 'the number of people'), 'the figure of visitors... fluctuated' (should be 'the number of visitors'), and 'the 8 years of time period' (redundant). Punctuation is generally functional, though there are some unnecessary commas, such as in 'it is evident that, the figure'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the intended meaning. A greater focus on subject-verb agreement and article usage would improve the accuracy.
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