Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of first time and returning visitors to Caryl island from 2000 - 2008.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that the first time visitors initially declined before rising significantly whereas returning visitors increased significantly and reached to their peak in 2006, before falling slightly.
To begin with, in year 2000 around 8000 people visited the Caryl Island. Compare with around 3000 first time visitors returning visitors number of visitors reached 4000. In the opening year 2002 the number of visitors were sharply around 4000 people go back from the island and after that the number of first time visitors follows the upward trend and around 6000 people visit the island.
To be continues with the around 12000 visitors returning from the island in year 2004. Meanwhile, in the year 2006 around 9000 first time visitor and 15000 people returned from the island and it had an peak. However the figure subsequently decreased around the 13500 in 2008 and the first time visitors follows the upward trend in year 2008 it had on their peak around 12000. The first time people visit the island
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for both visitor types. You successfully identified the peak years and the overall direction of the data. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For example, stating 'around 8000' when the graph shows a different value, or using vague phrasing like 'people go back from the island' instead of 'returning visitors', makes the information less clear. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the data points and use precise terminology to describe the categories provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical or disjointed. Phrases like 'To be continues with' are grammatically incorrect and do not function well as cohesive devices. The progression of ideas is sometimes confusing, particularly in the third paragraph where the comparison between the two visitor types is difficult to follow. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Subsequently', 'Furthermore') would improve the logical flow and make the relationships between the data points more explicit.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'declined', 'rising significantly', and 'upward trend'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally hinder clarity, such as 'people go back from the island' instead of 'returning visitors' and 'it had an peak'. The repetition of 'around' and 'people' limits the sophistication of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise nouns and verbs related to data reporting and avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('the number of visitors were'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('the first time people visit the island' at the end is an incomplete fragment). While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that every sentence has a clear subject and a complete verb phrase. Proofreading for basic punctuation and sentence completion would also be beneficial.
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