Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the numbers of visitors who visited first time in Caryl Island and returned from there in between 2000 and 2008.
Overall, in the beginning of the period number of first time visitors in Carly Island most popular than the number of visitors who returned from there. While, through out the period the popularity is vise-versa, where the number of returned visitors rose rapidly and population of first time visitors was least popular at the end.
Initially, in 2000 the number of first time visitors higher than returned visitor with 8000 and approximately 3000 people respectively. In 2001, both the numbers of visitors were equal with 6000 visitors where the first time visitors gradually fell and the visitors of returning was increase steadily.
Secondly, after 2001 number of returned visitors were increase consistently and reached peaked at around 1500 in 2006 but at last fall marginally with 1300. However, the number of returned visitors were higher than the first time visitors. The number of first time climbed significantly and reach only upto 1200 at the end. Although the number of first time increased but in comparison, they were 1000 lesser the returned visitors by 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the initial trends and the final outcomes. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that returning visitors peaked at '1500' in 2006, whereas the graph clearly shows a figure closer to 15,000. Additionally, the description of the trends is sometimes confusing, such as using the term 'population' to describe visitor numbers. While you have attempted to make comparisons, the lack of precision in reading the data points hinders the overall clarity of the summary. To improve, ensure you carefully verify the scale and units on the axes before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Secondly' is used inappropriately as there was no 'Firstly' mentioned. Phrases like 'in between 2000 and 2008' and 'through out the period' are slightly awkward. The logical progression is occasionally disrupted by confusing sentence structures, such as the attempt to contrast the visitor types in the second paragraph. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'number of visitors' and 'first time visitors'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'returned from there' (instead of 'returning visitors') and 'population of first time visitors' (which is incorrect in this context). The use of 'vise-versa' is also misused here. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', or 'remained constant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'number of returned visitors were increase') and incorrect verb tenses or forms (e.g., 'reached peaked', 'first time visitors higher than'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading and a stronger grasp of basic sentence construction and tense consistency.
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