Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the graph depicts the tourists that visited the caryl isand in between 2000 to 2008.
overall, the numbers of first experincing visitors were rose over the period of time and the number of returning visitors was dramatically increased .
IN 2000 the number of returning students were around 2500 where these were rose about 10000 after two years in 2002 and it reached 12000 in 2004 but the returning visitors were peaked at 16000 in 2006 and then there is slightly decrease in numbers fromm 16000 to around 13000.
IN 2000 the numbers of first time visitors were declined from 8000 to 4000 in between 2000 to 2002 and the quantity of visitors has slightly increased in 2004 and from there the data has seen consistently rising from 2006 and finally reached at its peak in 2008 at around 12000 and the numbers in both are very different where the numbers of returning visitors seems pretty high .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for both visitor types. However, the overview is somewhat weak; it lacks a clear synthesis of the most significant trends. While you mention that numbers 'rose' and 'dramatically increased', the description of the data points is occasionally inaccurate (e.g., stating returning visitors were 'students'). The summary of the data is generally relevant, but the lack of precise comparison between the two categories throughout the body paragraphs limits the score. To improve, ensure you clearly contrast the two lines rather than just describing them in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive (e.g., starting multiple sentences with 'In 2000'). The logical progression is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'where these were rose' and 'and from there the data has seen'. While the overall structure is logical, the flow between sentences could be smoother. Using a wider variety of linking words like 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would help improve the cohesion of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as using 'experincing' instead of 'first-time' and referring to visitors as 'students'. Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'fromm' and 'isand'. You rely on basic verbs like 'rose' and 'declined' repeatedly. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'surged', or 'remained stable', and ensure that your terminology accurately reflects the data provided in the prompt.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Examples include 'the numbers of first experincing visitors were rose' (incorrect passive/active voice) and 'the returning visitors were peaked' (incorrect verb form). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the number of returning students were'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring correct tense usage before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms is essential.
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