Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The provided line graph presents the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, the data demonstrated between the specified duration, initially, the visitors visited first time were higher than returning visitors, while situation contrasted until the end.
Starting with the first time visitors, it was around 8,000 individuals in 2000. By the year 2002, the figures plummeted up to 4,000 people, which was a huge decline among whole chart. However, it took a steady growth until the end. From 2002 to 2004, it increased from 4,000 individuals to 6,000 individuals. Furthermore, trend was followed with similar pace and it ended up with 12,000 individuals in 2008.
On the other hand, line illustrates the number of visitors who returned from Caryl Island. Firstly, It began with 2,500 people, over the time, the figures increased up to 10,000 in 2002. Totally conversing to the people who were first arrivals. Moreover, the figures took a constant growth until 2006, over 15,000 individuals. Although, it fell slightly between 2006 and 2008, but remained higher than another graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for both visitor types. However, the overview is somewhat confusingly phrased, particularly the phrase 'while situation contrasted until the end'. While you have identified the key trends, the description of the data is occasionally imprecise, such as describing the decline in first-time visitors as a 'huge decline among whole chart' without clear context. To improve, ensure your overview clearly highlights the most significant trends (e.g., the crossover point) and use more precise language when describing the data points to ensure all parts of the task are fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Starting with', 'On the other hand', and 'Furthermore'. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, 'Totally conversing to the people' is unclear and does not effectively link the ideas. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes weak, making it difficult to follow the progression of the argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help create a smoother, more professional flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'plummeted', 'steady growth', and 'constant growth'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'visitors visited first time' (should be 'first-time visitors') and 'Totally conversing to' (likely meant 'in contrast to'). These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary choices are natural and contextually appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'the visitors visited first time were higher' and 'trend was followed with similar pace'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and sentence fragments like 'Although, it fell slightly...'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not completely prevent understanding. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve your accuracy.
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