Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of visitors who had visiting the Caryl Island for the first time and returning visitors from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, it has been seen that the returning visitors had the highest number. While, first time visitors had the lowest number.
In 2000, around 3,000 returning visitors were recorded and showed a significant changes after 2 yrs. However, in 2006 it reached the highest point of 15,000 visitors and in 2008 reached its lowest level at 13,000.
In 2000, 8,000 first time visitors were recorded and had a minimal decrease by 2002. However, it had the highest peak until the end of 2008 reaching to 10,000 visitors.
In conclusion, visitors who is returning had the highest peak by 2008. It it shown that it had the increase of numbers of visitor by 10,000 in 2006. In contrast, first time visitors increase 2,000 people by the end of 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for both visitor types. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the statement that 'returning visitors had the highest number' is contradicted by the data in the early years of the graph. Additionally, the summary of the trends is slightly inaccurate in places, such as the description of the 2006 peak. While the key features are identified, the lack of precision in reporting the data points and the slight misinterpretation of the overall trends prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that data points are cited accurately and that comparisons are logically consistent with the visual information provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'In 2000' and 'However'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the concluding paragraph contains confusing phrasing, such as 'It it shown that it had the increase of numbers of visitor'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'it') is clear would enhance the flow and coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'had visiting the Caryl Island' and 'had the highest peak'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic descriptors like 'highest' and 'lowest'. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'a marginal decline', or 'a significant surge'. Additionally, ensure that word forms are used correctly to avoid errors that occasionally distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'visitors who had visiting', 'It it shown', and 'visitors who is returning'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors suggests a lack of control over more complex structures. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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