Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The rendered line graph depicts the count of first time commuters and few visitors go back who reached Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Overall, the maximum number of returning visitors were visit in Caryl Island, while the minimum visitors visit in caryl Island that were came first time in a given time period.

In detail, Initially there were 8000 commuters visit first time in Caryl Island in the year of 2000. After two years, it decreased with 4000 visitors in 2002 and reached at 4000.

It was a sudden increase in 2004 which was 6000 people visit there. Eventually, it was increase in first time visitors which was 12000 till from 2004 to 2008.

In case of returning visitors, In 2000 there were a below 4000 visitors visit there. After a two year, returning visitors count was increased and reached at 10000. Then, again it was a increase in 2002 to 2006 which reached at above 14000. At last, there was a decrease in 2008, which reached at 13000 near about.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main trends for both visitor categories. However, the response lacks precision in reporting data. For example, you state 'it decreased with 4000 visitors in 2002 and reached at 4000', which is slightly confusing. Additionally, the overview is a bit repetitive and could be more concise. To improve, ensure you clearly highlight the key differences and the most significant changes over the period. While you cover all parts of the task, the lack of clarity in some data descriptions prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'In detail', 'In case of', 'Then, again'). Some transitions feel forced, and the logical flow between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would improve the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and occasionally inaccurate. Using 'commuters' to describe tourists is incorrect, as commuters travel for work. Phrases like 'few visitors go back' and 'that were came first time' are unnatural and show a lack of control over word choice and collocation. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and avoid repeating basic verbs like 'visit' or 'reached'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with verb tenses and sentence construction. Examples include 'the maximum number of returning visitors were visit' and 'it was increase in first time visitors'. These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and struggle with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and proofreading for common errors like unnecessary 'it was' constructions.

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