Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided graph below illustrates the number of first time the visitors and the returning tourists who visited Caryl island from 2000 and 2002 and 2004 and 2006 and last 2008.
In 2000, First time visitors 8000 people go to the Caryl Island then next two years after it was decline 8000 to 4000 visitors after that In 2004 it was increase 4000 to 6000 first time tourist and then 2000 increase in 2006 initial guest and last In 2008 it was suddenly above 8000 to 12000 first time guest.
In two thousand years, Returning visitors 3000 humans go to the Caryl Island after that In 2002 it has boost 10000 repeat visitors and then next two years after it was expand 10000 to [redacted phone] regular visitors further more 3 thousand people above in 2006 and last In 2008 it was decrease 15000 to 13000 returning users.
Overall, returning visitors has above every year but In 2008 decrease 3000 humans and first time visitors has almost every years equal.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the presentation is significantly hindered by inaccurate data reporting. For example, you state that returning visitors reached 120,000 in 2004, which is a massive misreading of the graph's scale. Additionally, the description of trends is repetitive and lacks analytical depth. While you identify the main categories, the failure to accurately interpret the figures and the lack of a clear, cohesive overview prevent this from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on accurately transcribing the data points and grouping information logically rather than listing every year individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is mechanical and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple transitions like 'after that' and 'and then', which makes the flow feel unnatural. There is a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices to link the data points effectively. Furthermore, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure feels like a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. Improving the use of linking words such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would help improve the logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. Using terms like 'humans' to describe visitors is unnatural; 'tourists' or 'visitors' would be more appropriate. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'it has boost' instead of 'it increased' or 'it saw a boost'. The repetition of basic verbs like 'go', 'increase', and 'decrease' limits your ability to describe the trends with precision. You should aim to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'returning visitors has above'), tense usage (e.g., 'it was increase'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to follow. The range of structures is limited to simple sentences, with few attempts at complex grammatical forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and using articles and prepositions accurately.
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