Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given line graph illustrates the difference between the first time visitors and the returning vistors who visited caryl island from 2000 to 2008

As we see the red line which depicts the visitors who have already visited earlier, we can see that there were 3000 people arrived in 2000 for the first time later it increased to 10000 people that visited in 2002. Furthermore it increased to 12000 in 2004 and then 15000 in 2006 but it drastically decreased to 13000 in 2008

Also, if we see the blue line it depicts the first time visitor. By seeing the graph there were 8000 people in 2000 .later it decreased to 4000 people who arrived in 2002 then it increased to 2004. At the end in 2008 there were 12000 people arrived in Caryl Island.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main trends for both visitor categories, the analysis lacks a clear overview or summary of the key features, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The description of the data is purely mechanical, listing figures year-by-year rather than synthesizing the information or making meaningful comparisons between the two groups. To improve, ensure you include an introductory overview that highlights the most significant trends and ensure you meet the length requirement to fully develop your response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure for this task. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'As we see' and 'Also, if we see' are informal and mechanical. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas within and between sentences. To improve, try using a wider variety of transition signals such as 'In contrast,' 'Conversely,' or 'Following this trend' to create a smoother flow of information throughout the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs like 'increased,' 'decreased,' and 'arrived.' There is little attempt to use more precise or varied language to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' or 'experienced a sharp decline.' Additionally, there are minor errors in capitalization, such as 'caryl island,' which should be capitalized as a proper noun. To reach a higher band, focus on incorporating a broader range of topic-specific vocabulary and synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies mostly on simple sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'there were 3000 people arrived,' which should be '3000 people arrived' or 'there were 3000 people who arrived.' The punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods in several places. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the presence of frequent errors in basic grammar limit the score. Focus on using a mix of complex sentences and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.

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