Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the counting of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, there are significant changes among the visitors in last eight years. The lowest number of first time visitor was in 2002 and the highest was in 2008. Similarly the lowest returning visitor was in 2000 and the highest was in 2008.
In 2000 the first time visitor was around 8000 people and it declined over the years in 2002 the visitors were around 4000. But there is a significant turns in returning visitors, at the starting of 2000 the returning visitors were 2500 only, but it increased over the years. In 2004 the number reached to 12000 visitors.
On the other hand, the first time visitors increased over the year. In 2006 the visitors were around 10000 and in 2008 it reached to 11000 visitors. Compared with the returning visitors it increased in 2006 and reached to 15000 visitors, which is the highest visitors ratio among all years, meanwhile it suddenly declined in 2008 and reached to 13000 visitors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview and identifies key trends, such as the decline and subsequent recovery of first-time visitors and the general upward trend for returning visitors. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of the 2004 data for returning visitors is clear, but the comparison between the two groups in 2006 and 2008 is slightly confusing due to imprecise phrasing. While the main features are highlighted, the report would benefit from more precise data referencing and a more structured comparison between the two categories throughout the period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', 'But', and 'On the other hand'. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'there is a significant turns in returning visitors'. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved to create a more natural, cohesive narrative. Paragraphing is appropriate for the task type.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe trends (e.g., 'declined', 'increased', 'reached'). However, there are instances of unnatural word choice and minor errors, such as 'illustrates the counting of' instead of 'illustrates the number of' and 'highest visitors ratio' instead of 'highest number of visitors'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To reach a higher band, the student should incorporate more varied synonyms and precise collocations related to data description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the lowest number of first time visitor was' (should be plural 'visitors') and 'at the starting of 2000' (should be 'at the start of'). Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. A greater focus on proofreading for pluralization and prepositional accuracy would be beneficial.
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