Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart illustrates that data from 2000 to 2008 ,who first time visit and another who came back again in Caryl island .
overall, it is clear that the number of visitors who return to Caryl Island accounted high than people who first time visited .
Looking first at visitors who came first time in 2000 noted for around 8000 .While the ratio declined sharply . After decreasing gradually to 4000 in 2002 ,the figure began to increase sharply , it detected by 12000 in 2008 .
Regarding the other figure about 3000 individuals who had returned to Caryl Island in 2000 . The number of visitors having risen significantly to 10000 in 2002 . The proportion of visitor before decreasing sharply to 12000 persons in 2008 rose dramatically from 10000 to 15000 in 2006 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify the main trends, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear, accurate overview. The data reporting is inconsistent; for instance, you mention the figure for returning visitors reached 12,000 in 2008, but the graph likely shows a different trend. Furthermore, the description of the data is often confusing, such as the contradictory statement regarding the 2008 figures for returning visitors. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, accurate summary of the main trends and support them with precise data points while meeting the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical or incorrect way, such as 'Looking first at...' and 'Regarding the other figure...', which do not always connect the sentences logically. The lack of clear transitions between the overview and the body paragraphs makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on using linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, moving from the general overview to specific, well-sequenced details.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'accounted high than' and 'it detected by' are non-standard and impede clarity. There is a reliance on basic vocabulary, and the attempt to use more complex terms often leads to errors in collocation and word choice. For example, 'ratio' is used incorrectly to describe a number of visitors. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for describing trends, such as 'a sharp decline' or 'a significant increase', and ensure you use precise terminology for data interpretation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the meaning unclear. There are issues with sentence structure, such as the opening sentence which is a fragmented clause rather than a complete statement. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are also problematic (e.g., 'who first time visit'). While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty, leading to a lack of control over grammar and punctuation. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors in tense and word order.
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