Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line garaph illustrates the number of initial guest and repeat taravels who visited cary island between 200 and 2008.
Overall,the number of returning visitors increasd signifiuciant and remained higher than first time visitors from 2002 onwards. In contrast, first time visitors intially declined before rising steadily.
In 2000, approximately 7000 people visited carly island for the first time,while only 3000 werw returning viositors had fallen to around 4000. However , the figure for returnig visitors increasd gredually , reaching about 6000 in 2004 and 9000 in 2006 , before climing to approximately 12000 in 2008 .
Similarly, the number of retuuring visitors continued to grow , reaching 12000 in 2004 and peaking at 15-000 in 2006 . However, this figure then decreasd slightly to around 13000 in 2008 . In conclued,both categories shoeed an upwaed trend over the period despite some fluctuations.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a summary of the main trends and makes some comparisons, but it fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words. Furthermore, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the text mentions '15-000' for returning visitors in 2006, which is confusing, and the description of the trends is occasionally contradictory or unclear. While the overall trend is identified, the lack of sufficient length and the presence of factual inconsistencies in the reporting of figures prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure all data points are accurately transcribed and that the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'However', and 'Similarly'. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by the errors in data reporting and some awkward phrasing. The logical progression is present but sometimes hindered by the lack of clarity in the sentences. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'garaph', 'taravels', 'cary', 'signifiuciant', 'gredually', 'climing', and 'retuuring'. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the text difficult to read. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'fluctuations' and 'upward trend', the overall control is weak. To improve, you must proofread your work carefully to eliminate basic spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more precise synonyms for common words like 'increase' or 'decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the quality of the writing. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'both categories shoeed'), incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation errors (e.g., 'Overall,the'). The sentence structure is often clunky, and the misuse of numbers and symbols (e.g., '15-000') further detracts from the accuracy. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation and tense consistency. Increasing the variety of complex sentences while ensuring they remain error-free will also help raise your score.
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