Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The rendred line graph illustrates the information about the count of first time travellers and returning commuters who visited from 2000 to 2008.

Overall, the highest count of travellers visited in 2008,while the lowest number of travellers visited year 2000. Besides,maximum number of commuters returns in 2006, whilst least was returning in year 2000.

In deatils, 8000 travellers visited in year 2000 for the first time which declined after 2 years at 4000, whereas count of commuters inclined by 2000 travellers in year 2004,while it reached at its peak point in year 2008 with 12,000 count of visitors.

In case of returning visitors, almost 2500 travellers returned in year 2000 which inclined at 10,000 commuters after 2 years. Count of returning visitors inclined at 12,000 in year 2004, whereas returning travellers at its peak point in 2006 with almost 15,000 visitors, while it was decreasing at the almost 14,000 travellers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for both first-time and returning visitors. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the description of the first-time visitors' trend in 2004 and the peak in 2008 contains figures that do not clearly align with the provided graph. While the overview identifies the start and end points, it lacks a clear synthesis of the most significant trends. The response addresses the task requirements, but the lack of precision in reporting data points limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'whereas' and 'while'. The logical progression between sentences is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'In case of returning visitors', which is not a standard way to introduce a new section. Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow of ideas within paragraphs is occasionally disjointed, making the overall structure feel somewhat forced.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate to convey the basic meaning, but it is limited and contains several inaccuracies. Words like 'rendred' (likely a misspelling of 'rendered'), 'commuters' (used to describe tourists, which is a collocation error), and 'inclined' (used incorrectly to mean 'increased') demonstrate a lack of precision. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated control. The vocabulary is sufficient for the task but lacks the flexibility and precision required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles ('in year 2000'), incorrect verb forms ('maximum number of commuters returns'), and punctuation errors. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors is noticeable and occasionally distracts the reader. The control over complex structures is inconsistent, and the errors in basic grammar prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

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