Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph provides information about the amount of first time visitors and returning visitors. Who visited Carly Island between 2000 and2008.
It is clear in graph that the first time visitors considerably decrease between 2 years than it dramatically increased over the period. Meanwhile the returning tourists sharply reached to high peak by the end of 2008, who visited in Carly island.
The first time visitors started from the 8000 people and reduced significantly 4000 population during 2 years. Then it grows considerably 12000 visitors from2002 and 2008.
If it comes to the returning visitors have begun from the 3000 visitors and there was a significand increase of 15000 visitors which reached to the highest peak. However it decreased around 13800 visitors by the end of two years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main trends, the analysis is underdeveloped. You mention the initial decline and subsequent rise for first-time visitors, but the data points are sometimes inaccurate or confusingly presented (e.g., 'reduced significantly 4000 population'). The overview is present but lacks clarity. To improve, ensure you provide a more detailed summary of the key features and ensure all data points are accurately transcribed from the graph. The under-length nature of the response prevents a higher score as the task is not fully addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is often interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. For example, 'If it comes to the returning visitors' is an unnatural way to transition between points. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the connection between sentences feels mechanical. To improve, use a wider range of linking words such as 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Subsequently' to guide the reader through your comparison of the two visitor categories.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'increase' and 'decrease' without much variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'reached to high peak' (should be 'reached a peak') and '4000 population' (should be '4000 visitors'). Some phrases are grammatically awkward, which hinders the precision of your reporting. To achieve a higher band, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated,' 'surged,' or 'a significant decline,' and ensure you are using the correct terminology for the data provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include sentence fragments ('Who visited Carly Island...'), incorrect preposition usage ('reached to high peak'), and issues with tense consistency. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There are also errors in punctuation and capitalization, such as 'Carly' instead of 'Caryl' and 'from2002'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for minor errors in articles and prepositions.
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