Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited caryl island from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, it is evident that significant increase is was shown in travellers returning from island.while decrees was shown in other trend.
In details, the trend of first time visitors showed a gradual decreasing from 2000 to 2002 by 4000. afterward sharp climbed was seen from the year 2002 to 2008 just over 6000, while this trend showed a upsurged in case of Returning Visitors.
Looking ahead towards the Returning travellers showed an increase in 2000 from 2000 to 10,000 in the number of returning. Moreover, the trend showed minor fluctuations from the period of 2002 to 2006 skyrockted from 10000 to 15000 the peak value trend. Suddenly dropped down from 15000 to 13000 over the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main trends, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. You have attempted to report the main features, but the data points are occasionally confusing or inaccurately described (e.g., '2000 to 10,000 in the number of returning'). To improve, ensure you provide a more detailed summary of the data and double-check your figures against the graph. The under-length nature of the response means that the information is not fully developed, preventing a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'Looking ahead towards the Returning travellers'). Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, making the text feel like a list of observations rather than a fluid report. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words such as 'consequently,' 'in contrast,' or 'subsequently' to connect your ideas more logically. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the relationship between sentences is explicit.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word-choice errors, such as 'sharp climbed' instead of 'a sharp climb' and 'upsurged' used incorrectly. The spelling of 'decrees' (decreases) and 'skyrockted' (skyrocketed) also indicates a need for more careful proofreading. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise nouns and verbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' or 'remained stable.' Expanding your range of descriptive language will help you convey the data more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'significant increase is was shown,' and incorrect verb forms like 'gradual decreasing' instead of 'gradual decrease.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters and incorrect spacing. While you have attempted some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using articles correctly. Proofreading for simple errors like 'is was' will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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