Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of visitors who visit first time and also indicates about returning visitors Caryl Island during the period 2000 - 2008.
Overall, the number of first-time visitors of graph line is slightly decline from 2000 to 2002. After that, they hay significant climb are display on this graph. In contrast the graph line of returning visitor is also have surge during year 2000 - 2002. Thereafter the line when they are on their peak point they start fall down.
Looking at the first-time visitors, in 2002 they are on their lower point is around 4000. After that the figure is rapidly increased. In year 2006 of returning visitors is on their peak point the figure is something between 14000 to 16000 and later the figure in fall down.
The figure of first-time visitors from [redacted phone] in year 2000 and last figure in year 2008 is 12000. On the other hand, in returning visitors figures start from around 8000 in year 2000 and last figure is around between 14000 - 12000 in year 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for both visitor types. However, the reporting of data is often imprecise, such as 'something between 14000 to 16000' or 'around between 14000 - 12000'. The overview is present but lacks clarity due to grammatical issues. While the main trends are identified, the lack of precision in describing the data points and the somewhat disjointed presentation of figures prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that data points are described accurately and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant differences or trends without relying on vague estimations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. For example, 'After that, they hay significant climb are display on this graph' is difficult to follow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'In contrast' and 'On the other hand', the overall flow is often interrupted by grammatical errors, making the text feel somewhat disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. The student relies on basic terms such as 'figure', 'graph line', and 'number'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'they hay significant climb' (should be 'there was a significant climb') and 'the figure in fall down'. The range of vocabulary is just adequate to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, the student should learn more varied ways to describe trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'plateau', or 'dramatic increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('the number of first-time visitors... are display'), tense usage ('the figure in fall down'), and sentence structure ('the graph line of returning visitor is also have surge'). While some simple sentences are clear, the attempts at more complex structures are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent. A significant focus on basic sentence construction and verb tenses is necessary to improve clarity and accuracy.
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