Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The chart illustrates the figures of first time and re-visit tourist at Caryl Island between 2000 and 2008.
Overall, returning visitors had the lowest value in the beginning and showed a significant growth and closed at the most figures in visitors in the end, while first time tourists had the largest number of visitors in the starting and became the smallest number in the end of period.
The re-visitors had the lowest figures in the beginning and showed considerable growth, increasing from just above 2,000 visitors to just below 10,000 visitors in 2002, it surpassed the number of first time tourists, reached to just above 14,000 visitors in 2006 before decreasing slightly to around 14,000 people and became the highest figures in the end.
The first time tourist had the highest value in 2000 and it experienced a fluctuation, decreasing from 8,000 tourists to 4,000 tourists in 2002 before increasing to just below 12,000 visitors and became the lowest number of visitors in the end.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You accurately highlighted the key shift where returning visitors overtook first-time visitors. However, the report could be improved by including more precise data points to support your descriptions. For instance, when mentioning the 'significant growth' of returning visitors, citing the specific starting and ending figures would strengthen the analysis. Additionally, ensure that the data is reported consistently; you mention 'around 14,000' for returning visitors at the end, but the graph shows a slightly different trend. Overall, you have addressed all parts of the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the two categories. The progression of ideas is easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall' and 'while', to link ideas. However, the use of linking words is somewhat repetitive, and some transitions between sentences are slightly mechanical. To reach a higher band, try to vary your cohesive devices and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'it surpassed') clearly points back to the intended subject to avoid any ambiguity.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'significant growth' and 'experienced a fluctuation' are appropriate for this task. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'closed at the most figures' and 're-visit tourist'. These errors do not impede communication but indicate a need for more precise terminology. Using 'reached a peak' or 'the highest number of visitors' would be more natural than 'closed at the most figures'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For example, 'figures of first time and re-visit tourist' should be 'figures for first-time and returning tourists'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'the largest number of visitors in the starting'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points. Focusing on proofreading for pluralization and correct preposition use will help improve your accuracy.
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