Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph represents the number of new visitors and returning visitors who visited in Caryl Island in duration of 2000 to 2008. The data is given in numbers.
Overall, the number of first time visitors in year 2000 were highest at that time which fell to its all time low in 2002, but after that it started upward trend and it reached all time high in 2008. However, the graph of returning visitors were lowest in 2000 Which drastically increased in 2006 to its highest and fell after that year.
In year 2000, the number of new visitors were highest in that year which was 8000, which fell to 4000 in year 2002 which was a slight back downfall but however, it started the upward trend from year 2004 which was 6000 and it continued to rise after the rest to year and it reached its all time high in 2008 which was 12000 visitors.
Furthermore, the returning visitors from Caryl Island were least in year 2000 at 3000 and it increased drastically in year 2002 which was 10000 which leads to 12000 to 15000 in year 2004 and 2006 respectively. Although, the graph was rising it suddenly gets a break through in year 2008 and returned to 13000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main trends and provided key data points for both visitor categories. The overview clearly highlights the contrasting patterns between first-time and returning visitors. However, the response contains some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you stated that first-time visitors were at their highest in 2000 (8,000), but the graph shows they reached 12,000 in 2008. Additionally, the description of the returning visitors' trend is slightly confusing, particularly the mention of a 'break through' in 2008. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurately transcribed from the graph and that your comparisons are precise.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Furthermore', and 'Although' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as using 'however' twice in the same sentence or using 'which' repeatedly to connect clauses, which makes the flow feel repetitive. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your referencing (e.g., 'that year') is clear and unambiguous.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'upward trend', 'drastically increased', and 'all time high'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For example, 'slight back downfall' is not a standard English phrase, and 'gets a break through' is used incorrectly in this context. There are also minor errors in phrasing, such as 'visited in Caryl Island' instead of 'visited Caryl Island'. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and adverbs and ensuring they are used in the correct context will help improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of first time visitors... were') and preposition usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement—remember that 'the number' is singular—and work on using commas to separate clauses correctly. Reducing these frequent errors will significantly improve the clarity and professional tone of your writing.
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