Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the tota number of first time visitors and coming back visitors visited the Caryl Island between 2000 until 2008
Overall, the returning visitors is the higher than the first time visitors and maintained. First time visitors experience a decline however, remained increasing.
To begin with, returning visitors in 2000 for estimated number of 3000 in total, and gradually increased and reached it peak approximately 15000 in total number of returning visitors. However, in 2008 shows slightly reduced of nearly 14000.
While first time visitors has the highest record for about 8000 in 2000 initially and declined in 2002. However continuously increasing and reached it peak of nearly 12000 at the end in 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main trends, the analysis is underdeveloped. You mention that returning visitors reached a peak of 15,000, but the description of the trends lacks the necessary detail and comparative depth required for a higher band. The overview is also slightly confusing, as you state that returning visitors 'maintained' while also noting a decline. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive summary of the data points and ensure the response length is sufficient to fully cover the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, such as the jump between the overview and the body paragraphs. The use of linking words is limited, making the progression of ideas feel mechanical rather than fluid. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') to connect your ideas more naturally and improve the overall readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and basic. Phrases like 'coming back visitors' are unnatural; 'returning visitors' is the correct term used in the prompt. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'total number of returning visitors' being used redundantly. You rely on simple descriptors like 'increased' and 'declined' without attempting more precise vocabulary to describe the nature of the changes (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'surged', 'dipped'). Expanding your range of synonyms and focusing on accurate collocations will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the returning visitors is the higher than' (subject-verb agreement and comparative structure errors) and 'reached it peak' (possessive pronoun error). Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'While first time visitors has the highest record...'. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, correct use of articles, and the distinction between 'its' and 'it's'. Increasing the variety of your sentence structures will also help demonstrate better grammatical control.
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