Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Carly Island has been quite busy with visitiors from the year 2002 to 2008. This inflow of visitors has marked a dramatic change in terms of numbers of visitors for both the first timers and the returning visitors.

The year 2000 has a high number of first time visitors in Carly Island with a number of 8000 which was encouragung but was declining gradually to the pointbof 4000 in theyear 2002. This decline of first timers marked a postive increase after 2002 which started showing a sign of increase from 2003 with 2004 recording 6000 visitors, 2006 recording 8000 visitors and 2008 which was the highest period of the positive increase in numbers of first time visitors with a number of 12,000 visitors.

Returning visitors at Carly Island are not left unnoticed during these period of years. They also have a chnage in their own numbers of visitors within these years from 2000 to 2008. The year 2000 marked the lowest year of returning visitors in Carly Island with a number of 3000 visitors which increased in 2002 toa number of 10,000 and 12,000in 2004 and in 2006 it recorded the highest number of their returning visitors with a number of 15,000 and dropped below 14,000 in 2008.

In conclusion, the both the first visitors and returning visitors all recorded a high growth in figurenin thenyear 2006 compared to their starting point year of 2000 while the first time visitors shows a good sign of constant increase since 2002 the returning visitors has shown a decline in 2008 despite reaching it's highest point in 2006.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for both visitor categories. You successfully highlight the key features, such as the decline and subsequent recovery of first-time visitors and the peak of returning visitors in 2006. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two groups at specific points in time, rather than describing them in separate, isolated paragraphs. While the overview is present, it is somewhat repetitive in the conclusion. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview synthesizes the data more effectively rather than just restating the trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each category, and a conclusion. The progression of ideas is generally clear. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'the year 2000' or 'in the year'. Some transitions between sentences feel slightly forced. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'these periods') is precise would help the flow of the response feel more natural and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'inflow', 'dramatic change', and 'gradually'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and minor errors, such as 'pointbof', 'postive increase', and 'figurenin'. Some word choices are slightly imprecise, such as 'encouragung' (spelling error) and 'not left unnoticed'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that your spelling is accurate, as these small errors slightly detract from the overall professional tone of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the year 2000', 'the both the first visitors'), subject-verb agreement, and punctuation (e.g., missing spaces in 'pointbof' and '12,000in'). The sentence structure is often repetitive, relying heavily on 'The year X marked...'. To achieve a higher band, you should aim for more error-free sentences and a greater variety of complex structures, while paying closer attention to basic proofreading to eliminate minor slips.

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