Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates that the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Carly Island from 2000 to 20008.

Overview,the first time visitors in 8thousand people in 2000.And the year in 2002 in island in the 4thousand people visited.However,in 2004, 6000 people visited.And the 2006 year equal people visited in 2000.

First of all,lowest people visted in 2000year.However,people increasing visited in 2008.In 2008 year 12thousand people visited in Island.In 2002 people do not visited in island.In 2006 people visited in island counting increasin in the competion of 2002.From the year 2008,people counting increasing.In 2002 people counting deacrising.

In conclusion,normal people visited in island from 2002.However in 2008,many people visited in island.From 2002 people visited counting deacrising.In 2004 people visited in island counting deacrising.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the content is fragmented and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the trends shown in the graph. The data points mentioned are often confusing or contradictory (e.g., stating 8,000 visitors in 2000, then later saying the lowest was in 2000). The response fails to distinguish clearly between 'first-time' and 'returning' visitors, which is a core requirement of the prompt. The overview is underdeveloped and does not highlight the main features or significant comparisons effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and repetitive. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'However' and 'In 2002'. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. The structure is mechanical, and the lack of clear transitions between sentences prevents the development of a coherent argument or summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'people', 'visited', and 'counting', which are used incorrectly in several instances (e.g., 'people counting increasing'). There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends or data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. Spelling errors, such as 'deacrising' and 'competion', further detract from the clarity of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and word order (e.g., 'the year in 2002 in island in the 4thousand people visited'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The lack of complex structures and the high frequency of basic grammatical errors make the text difficult to read and understand.

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