Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrate the number of visitors first time and the returning visitors who visit caryl island from 2000 to 2008.
The number of visitors are shown in thasunds and year are also menstioned in the graph.
As we saw in 2000 the first time visitor strating from 8000 decline stright to the 4000 in 2002 and then gradually increasing till 2008 with the number of 12000 visitors.
But in the number of returning visitor there was a sharp rise in the graph from 200 to 2002 . then with a slight fluctuation number of returning visitors gradually rising till 2006 with the hightest number of 15000 returning visitors in three years furthermore from 2006 to 2008 there was a drop in returning visitorshown in the graph.
In the comparison the both visitors who visited the caryl island the returning visitors are more intersted to revisiting the island and the number of visitors are gradually rising .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for both visitor types. However, the overview is weak; it merely restates the prompt rather than highlighting the significant trends or differences. While the data points are generally accurate, the analysis lacks depth. For instance, the comparison in the final paragraph is vague and does not effectively synthesize the data. To improve, ensure you include a clear overview that summarizes the most striking differences or trends, such as the overall growth in visitor numbers or the distinct patterns of fluctuation between the two groups.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. Phrases like 'As we saw in' and 'In the comparison the both' are awkward and do not flow naturally. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the data and the conclusion is weak. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would significantly enhance the logical flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are several spelling errors, such as 'thasunds' (thousands), 'menstioned' (mentioned), 'strating' (starting), and 'stright' (straight). Additionally, word choice is sometimes imprecise, such as 'intersted to revisiting'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the frequent spelling mistakes prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to trends (e.g., 'fluctuate', 'peak', 'decline') and proofread carefully to eliminate basic spelling errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The number of visitors are'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization or ending punctuation. While these errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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