Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line chart illustrates information about the number of tourists in [redacted phone] of Caryl Island who's first time visit to Island and who is returning back.

In 2000 the number of first-time tourists is 8000. while in 2002 it decreased quickly to 4000. In contrast, it increased slowly to 6000 in 2004. after that is increased gradually to its initial number 8000 in 2005 and then ten thousand in 2006 and reached to twelve thousand in 2008.

While the returner is approximately 3500 in 2000. In addition, it increased dramatically to ten thousand in 2002. and then it increased gradually to twelve thousand in 2004. in 2005 it reached to fourteen thousand and in 2006 it increased steadily about fifteen thousand and then decreased Fastly down from fourteen thousand in 2008.

In result, the number of returners tourists are significant in 8 years. in 2000 it about 3500 and then with the passage of time it increased dramatically.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for both visitor types. However, the overview is missing; a summary of the most significant trends (e.g., the overall growth in both categories) is essential for a higher band. Some data points are reported, but the comparison between the two groups is underdeveloped. The conclusion provided is somewhat repetitive and does not add new analytical insight. To improve, ensure you include a clear overview paragraph after the introduction that highlights the main trends observed across the entire period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In result' and 'In addition' used at the start of sentences where they do not logically fit. The flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second and third paragraphs. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'meanwhile', 'furthermore') and ensuring they are used in the correct context would significantly improve the logical progression of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several awkward phrasings, such as 'returning back' (redundant) and 'decreased Fastly' (incorrect adverb usage). The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic verbs like 'increased' and 'decreased'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise reporting verbs and adverbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'surged', or 'a marginal increase', and avoid non-standard word forms like 'Fastly'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of returners tourists are'), incorrect sentence fragments (e.g., 'In contrast, it increased slowly to 6000 in 2004. after that is increased...'), and misuse of articles and prepositions. While there is an attempt at complex sentence structures, they are often marred by punctuation errors and incorrect verb tenses. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.

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