Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The line graph illustrates the comparison between the number of visitors visiting for the first time and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, the number of first-time visitors was the most numerous at the beginning of the period which was eventually surpassed by returning visitors. Furthermore both the first time as well as returning visitors witnessed an increase over the period.
A detailed analysis of the line graph reveals that first time visitors dropped considerably from 8000 visitors to 4000 visitors during 2000 to 2002, before rebounding to 6000 visitors in 2004. Then this figure increased significantly to 12000 visitors in 2008.
On the other hand, the number returning visitors rose sharply from 3000 visitors to 10000 visitors during 2000 to 2002 and then it increased slightly to 12000 visitors in 2004. Furthermore this figure observed a moderate incline to 15000 visitors in 2006, before dropping back to 13000 in 2008
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response effectively identifies the main trends and makes relevant comparisons between the two visitor categories. You have successfully highlighted the key features, such as the initial decline in first-time visitors and the overall growth for both groups. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the data. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with absolute precision; for instance, the graph shows the returning visitors starting at 3,000 in 2000, but the description of the 2002-2004 period could be more nuanced to reflect the exact peaks and troughs shown in the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on each visitor type. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'before rebounding to' are used effectively to guide the reader through the information. The progression of ideas is smooth and easy to follow. To improve, ensure that the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is slightly more seamless, and avoid repetitive sentence structures when introducing new data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information clearly. Phrases like 'witnessed an increase', 'rebounding to', and 'moderate incline' are well-chosen and appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. There is some repetition of the word 'visitors', which could be mitigated by using synonyms or referring to the groups as 'the former' or 'the latter' where appropriate. The vocabulary is generally accurate and fits the context of describing trends in a line graph.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures with good control. Most sentences are error-free, and the punctuation is generally accurate. There are minor slips, such as the missing article in 'the number returning visitors' (should be 'the number of returning visitors'). While the grammar is strong, incorporating a wider variety of complex grammatical structures—such as passive voice or more sophisticated relative clauses—would further enhance the quality of the writing and demonstrate greater flexibility.
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