Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph is about the visitors from 2000 to 2008. The x axis is about the years starting from the year 2000 to 2008 and on y axis is about the graph showing about the members. They is line graph repesented here RED and Blue colours. In the year 2000 the red line is going up around 14,000 then it is slowly going down from year of 2006. Then the blue colour is going down which about the first time visitors from 8000 visitors to 4000 visitors and then line is gone from the year 2002 and stops at 12000 visitors in years 2008. In the graphs showing about the returning visitors more comparing to first time visitors. This the graph showing about the island which visitors are came for the first time and the returning the visitors back from Caryl island from the year 2000 to 2008 who are visited.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the main trends effectively. The description of the data is fragmented and lacks precision, particularly regarding the specific years and values. For instance, the statement 'the line is gone from the year 2002' is inaccurate and confusing, as it does not clearly explain the trend for the first-time visitors. The response lacks a proper introduction and a summary of the key features, which are essential for Task 1. The information provided is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall patterns of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and paragraphing. It is written as a single block of text, which hinders readability. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of information is unclear. The referencing is often confusing, such as the mention of 'the red line' and 'the blue colour' without clearly defining which category they represent at the start. The sentences are often repetitive and lack the necessary structure to guide the reader through the data analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'the graph is about' and 'the x axis is about' are used repeatedly, showing a limited range of expression. There are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'members' instead of 'visitors' and 'the line is gone' instead of describing a trend. The lack of precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined') significantly limits the ability to convey the information accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('visitors are came'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the phrasing is often awkward, making it difficult to follow the intended meaning. The lack of control over basic sentence construction is a significant issue throughout the text.

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