Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The illustrates the information about the number of first time visitors and returning visitors to the island named Caryll from the time period of 2000 to 2008

Overall, the highest record of the number of visitors that have been achieved the highest is of returning visitors to the Caryll island that was started from about 3000 returners in 2000 and finished up to 13000 returning visitors in 2008.

If we take a look to the first time visitors of the Caryll island in he record, So hardly 8000 people visited the island for the first time and the record went till 12000 visitors to the Caryll island in the year 2008.

As this record probably shows that the people who visited the Caryll island did came back to visit again the island again as it seems to be from the time period of 2000 to the year 2008 reaching up.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for both visitor types. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, well-structured overview. While you mention the starting and ending points, the description of the trends is repetitive and lacks precision. For example, stating 'the record went till 12000' is vague. To improve, you should focus on comparing the two categories more effectively, such as noting when the lines crossed or highlighting the specific rates of growth. The summary is present but could be more analytical to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow between them is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'the record'. The final paragraph is particularly disjointed and does not effectively synthesize the information provided in the graph. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus that contributes to the overall summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'record' and 'visitors' without much variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'highest record of the number of visitors that have been achieved the highest' and 'finished up to', which sounds unnatural. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained steady', or 'experienced a significant increase'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you describe the trends more accurately and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The illustrates the information', 'did came back', and 'visit again the island again'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. The punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and avoid redundant phrasing. Practice constructing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions (e.g., 'although', 'while', 'whereas') to demonstrate a better command of English grammar.

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