Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The information graph illustrates the information related to touristers vists Caryl island between 2000 and 2008
In Overview, the highest data collected in 2006 While , the lowest data recorded in 2000.
In 2000, the population of first time visters are recorded approximately 3000 While, the return visitors data was collected by 8000.In Addition, the data recorded from first time in 2002 was sharply increased to 10000,However, return visitors data sharply dropped to 4000. In 2004 , the data of both visitors was increased by 2000 .
Moreover, in 2006, the data recorded from first time visitors jump to almost 15000 while , the data recorded from return visitors also recorded to 10000. At the end, the data recorded from first time visitors decreased below 14000 additionally, the return visitors data increased by 2000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the report covers the main trends, the analysis is underdeveloped. The overview is very brief and lacks a clear summary of the overall trends. Furthermore, the description of the data is somewhat mechanical, listing figures without providing sufficient comparative analysis or highlighting the most significant features effectively. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and expand on the data points with more detailed comparisons, ensuring the response meets the length requirement to allow for a full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by the lack of depth and some awkward phrasing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In Addition', 'However', and 'Moreover', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a repetitive manner. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences feels disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus that contributes to the overall summary of the graph.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'the data recorded from' and 'visitors'. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'touristers' instead of 'tourists' and 'vists' instead of 'visits'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision or variety. To improve, try to incorporate a broader range of synonyms and descriptive verbs (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable') to describe the trends in the graph, and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'population... are recorded', 'visitors... jump') and incorrect preposition usage. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by punctuation errors or awkward phrasing. The lack of control over basic grammar and sentence structure makes the text difficult to follow at times. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, consistent tense usage for past data, and correct punctuation to ensure your sentences are clear and grammatically sound.
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