Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given graph illustrates the visitors related to first time and returning between 2000 to 2008 who visited Carly Island.

Overall, red color shows returning while blue f for first time visitors. Returning vesiters have experienced of rising throughout the period before the year of 2008. Whereas first time vesiters revealed significant declined in a start of the years then gradually increases by followed years.

In 2000, first time visitors shows 8000 vesiters while returning vesiters have experienced of 3000. Next year in 2002, returning vesiters revealed sharply increased to 10000, in contrast, returning visitors has significantly fell to 4000. Throughout the period the blue color demonstrated growth after 2002 whereas red color from the start. In 2004, 12000 vesiters observed for returning and for the first time vesiters it reached to 6000. After 2006, the ratio of red dye has declined from 15000 to near below of 14000 in 2008, in contrast, first time visitors reached to 12000 in 2008 without decreases after 2002

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, including the trends for both visitor types. However, the report is marred by significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, you state that first-time visitors were 8,000 in 2000, whereas the graph shows a different figure, and your description of the trends is often confusing or contradictory (e.g., stating a 'significant declined' followed by 'gradually increases' when the data shows otherwise). While you attempt to provide an overview, the lack of precision in reporting the data points and the confusion between the two categories prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully check the axes and data points before writing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear due to confusing referencing. For example, you use 'red color' and 'blue color' to refer to the categories, which is less professional than using the labels provided. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'in contrast' and 'whereas' in ways that do not always logically connect the sentences. Paragraphing is present but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'vesiters' instead of 'visitors'. You rely on basic descriptors like 'rising' and 'declined' and struggle with accurate collocations. The use of 'red dye' to describe a line on a graph is inappropriate for an academic report. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary that would allow for precise reporting of trends. To improve, focus on learning specific academic vocabulary for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', and 'a downward trend', and ensure you use the correct terminology for the categories provided in the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'first time visitors shows'), incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'has significantly fell'), and awkward phrasing that obscures meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the use of commas. While the meaning is generally discernible, the frequency of errors is high enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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