Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given repersentation demonstrates the number of people who visited Caryl Island from year 2000 to 2008.
To begin with the year 2000, people who visited there for the first time were 8000 and the people who visited again were 3000. Whereas, in year 2002 first time visiting people number seemed to decreased at 4000 and the returning people were increased at 10000.
Moving further, from year 2002 to 2004 both first time and returning visitors number were increased to 6000 and 12000, respectively. Moreover, number of newcomers were at 10000, whereas repeat visitors were in their peak at 15000 in year 2006.
At last, a decrease was seen in repeat visitors in year 2008 at 13800 and newcomers were in their peak at 12000
Overall, in starting number of newbies were more as compared to returners which changed at last where returners were more in number as compared to newbies.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview of the main trends and identifies key features such as the peak years for both categories. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, relying heavily on listing data points rather than synthesising the information. While the comparison between first-time and returning visitors is present, the description of the trends could be more analytical. The summary at the end is accurate, but the overall development of the response is limited by the repetitive structure of the body paragraphs. To improve, focus on grouping data to highlight significant shifts rather than reporting each year chronologically.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moving further', and 'Overall' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing within sentences could be smoother. For instance, the phrasing 'first time visiting people number' is clunky and affects the flow. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal cohesion within the body paragraphs could be strengthened by using more varied linking phrases to connect the data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the sophistication required for a higher band. There is a reliance on basic descriptors like 'increased' and 'decreased'. The use of informal terms such as 'newbies' is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires a formal tone. Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'repersentation' (spelling) and 'first time visiting people number' (awkward collocation). Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends would significantly improve the quality of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder readability. Examples include 'first time visiting people number seemed to decreased' (incorrect verb form) and 'number of newcomers were' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are missing articles and awkward phrasing throughout. While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage would be beneficial.
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