Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the line graph illustrate the proportion of the tourists visiting first time and returning visitor visiting Caryl island from year 2000 to 2008.The red line in the line graph demonstrates the returning visitors who visited carly island.while on the other hand the blue line describes the visitors visiting caryl island for the first time.
This graph have a data on the number of visitors returning and visiting the caryl island for the first time.According to the given information the number of returning visitors has gradually increased than the first time visitor in these past eight years.
The number of first time visitor in year 2000 was 8000 which was way more than the returning visitors which is nearly some where around 3000.But as the time goes on the number of returning visitors has rise in 2002 the number of first time visitor was 4000,than 6000 in 2004 ,10000 in 2006 and in last 12000 in 2008 respectively and same as the number of returning visitors rapidly increased 13700 in 2008 as in 2002 it was at 10000 and then it again boosts to 12000 in 2004 and 15000 in 2006 bur in the last year it drops to nearly 13700 visitors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the trends for both visitor types. However, the overview is weak; it lacks a clear summary of the overall trends and fails to highlight the most significant changes effectively. The data reporting is somewhat mechanical and contains inaccuracies, such as the claim that returning visitors 'gradually increased' while the data shows significant fluctuations. Furthermore, the comparison between the two groups is not always clear. To improve, ensure the overview synthesizes the data rather than just listing figures, and double-check the accuracy of the numbers extracted from the graph to ensure the summary is reliable.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'while on the other hand' and 'but as the time goes on', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or sound unnatural. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two visitor categories. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow and readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There is frequent repetition of words like 'visitors', 'number', and 'first time'. Some word choices are imprecise, such as 'boosts' and 'in last', which do not fit the formal tone required for an academic report. There are also minor spelling errors, such as 'carly' instead of 'Caryl'. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of synonyms and more precise reporting verbs (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'surpassed') to describe the data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the line graph illustrate', 'This graph have'), incorrect tense usage, and punctuation errors. The misuse of articles and prepositions is also noticeable. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from being considered fluent. Focusing on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent tense usage will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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