Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The blue color line graph shows the first time visitors to Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008 and the brown color line graph shows the returning visitors to Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

In 2000, the first time visitors is around 8000 and returning visitors around 3000.

In 2008, the first time visitors is around 12000 and returning visitors around 13000 it clearly shows that the number of first time visitors and returning visitors have been increased gradually. But in 2002, the number of first time visitors have been decreased to 4000 and also a decreasing pattern shows in 2008 at the returning visitors line graph.

In conclusion, The first time visitors are increasing after 2002 but there no decreasing pattern in the returning visitors until 2006. The above graph has clearly shows that the Caryl Island has some trip attraction for visitors but in some few times there may be a decreasing patterns available for some reasons.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the overall upward trend and the starting/ending figures. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies. For instance, you mention a decrease in returning visitors in 2008, which contradicts the graph, and the description of the 2002 dip is slightly confusing. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the data points and provide a clearer overview of the trends rather than just listing individual years. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and lacks a strong summary of the key differences between the two visitor types.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of varied cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often mechanical (e.g., 'In 2000', 'In 2008', 'In conclusion'). The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two groups. To improve, use a wider range of linking words such as 'conversely', 'meanwhile', or 'subsequently' to connect your ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'line graph', 'visitors', and 'number'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'trip attraction' and 'decreasing patterns available'. The range is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'witnessed a significant rise'. Focus on using precise verbs and nouns to describe the movement of the lines.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the first time visitors is', 'the number... have been increased'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and attempt to combine simple sentences into complex ones using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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