Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the number of first time visitor and returning visitor who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

After 2002, the proportion of first time visitors rose steadily. On the other hand, returning visitors some time rose and fall.

In 2000, returning visitors who visited Caryl Island were 8000 after that generally decreased to 4000 in 2002. Then it steadily rose every year. In 2004, it were 6000 and in 2006 and 2008 it were 10000 and 12000 respectively.

while, in 2006 it had highest proportion of first time visitor who visited Caryl Island which is 15000 and in 2000 it had lowest proportion with 3000 first time visitors. Whereas, in 2002 and 2004 there were 10000 and 12000 visitors respectively. Finally in 2008, it fall 13000.

the red line indicated the returning visitors and blue line indicates the first time visitors who visited on Caryl Island.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying trends for both visitor categories. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends. The data reporting is generally accurate, but the inclusion of the final sentence describing the line colors is unnecessary and should have been integrated into the introduction or omitted. The response would benefit from a more cohesive synthesis of the data rather than listing figures year by year, which makes the comparison less effective.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of varied cohesive devices. Transitions such as 'On the other hand' and 'Whereas' are used, but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The final sentence is disconnected from the rest of the report, and the referencing (e.g., 'it' referring to visitor numbers) is occasionally ambiguous. Improved use of linking words and better paragraph structure would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'rose steadily', 'generally decreased', and 'it were' are used repeatedly. There is little attempt to use less common lexical items or precise collocations to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated' instead of 'some time rose and fall'). Some word choice errors, such as using 'proportion' when referring to raw numbers, indicate a lack of precision. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more descriptive verbs and nouns would improve the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'returning visitors some time rose and fall', 'it were 6000'). There are also issues with pluralization ('first time visitor' instead of 'visitors') and tense consistency. While the student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, the errors are persistent and occasionally impede the clarity of the information provided. Greater attention to basic grammatical rules and proofreading for agreement errors is necessary to reach a higher band.

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