Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph display the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visitors visited Cary in the Island from the 2000 to 2008.

Overall, in the first time visitors increasing the returning the visitors and the graph show the two line in the graph the blue line show the first time visitors and the red line show the returning visitors . In the visitors 8000 in the 2000 , the next year in the visitors is 4000 low in 2002. The visitors then high 6000 in the year 2004. The next year 2006 in the visitors again above is 10000. The last year in the 2008 in the visitors is 12000.

Now the returning visitors in the year 2000 is 6000 , then the next year 2002 in the visitors is 10000 , the next year the 2004 in the visitors is again is high 13000 , the next year 2006 in the visitors is 15000 is highest and the last year in 2008 the visitors 13000 is low then behind.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends. While it mentions the two categories, the description of the data is fragmented and lacks a cohesive summary of the main features. The data points provided are often confusing or inaccurate, such as stating '8000 in the 2000' and then '4000 low in 2002', which does not clearly reflect the visual information. The response lacks a comparative analysis, which is essential for Task 1. The information is presented as a list of figures rather than a structured report, making it difficult to identify the overall trends or key differences between the two visitor types.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The sentences are disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is extremely limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'the next year', 'the visitors'). There is no clear transition between the overview and the body paragraphs. The referencing is often unclear, and the lack of logical flow makes it difficult for the reader to follow the development of the information. The structure is mechanical rather than functional, failing to guide the reader through the data effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple phrases like 'the visitors' and 'the year', which limits the ability to describe the data with precision. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the visitors again above is 10000' and 'low then behind'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or to describe trends (e.g., using 'high' instead of 'peaked' or 'increased'). The lack of variety and the persistent errors in word usage significantly hinder the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('The line graph display'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'In the visitors 8000 in the 2000'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces placed incorrectly before commas. These persistent errors in basic grammar make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a lack of control over sentence formation.

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