Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The presented line graph illustrates number of entry of visitors and returning visitors who visited caryal island from 2000 to 2008.
Overall, In 2000, returning visitors has significantly higher between 2002. moreover, at the same time in 2002 first time visitors graph has fall down. Additionally 2002 to 2008 first time visitors graph show steady line.
In 2000, returning visitors has earn 3000 to 10000 in 2002 during the time graph has significantly higher in following period. moreover, In 2002 to 2004 graph shows the slightly increased and received 12000 amount of number. furthermore, during 2006 graph has achived maximum number which is 15,000. Also ,in 2008 graph is fall down.
first time visitors has earn 8000 amount of number in year 2000. Additionally, during 2000 to 2002 period of time graph show declin
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, the summary is incomplete; the final sentence is cut off mid-word, and the data description is fragmented and often inaccurate. While the response attempts to identify trends, the lack of a clear overview and the failure to complete the task mean that the main features are not adequately reported. The information is presented in a disjointed manner, making it difficult to follow the trends of the two visitor categories over the specified period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the internal progression of ideas is confusing. Cohesive devices such as 'moreover' and 'additionally' are used mechanically and often incorrectly, failing to link sentences in a meaningful way. The referencing is unclear, and the abrupt ending of the text prevents any sense of a coherent conclusion. The overall arrangement of information is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to track the data points effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic phrasing such as 'graph shows' and 'amount of number', which is imprecise. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'graph has earn' and 'graph has fall down'. The spelling of 'caryal island' (Caryl Island) and 'achived' (achieved) also indicates a lack of control. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with the precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences missing articles, using incorrect verb tenses, or suffering from subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'returning visitors has significantly higher'). The use of complex structures is attempted but consistently fails, resulting in ungrammatical phrasing. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalization and misuse of commas. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read.
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