Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph provide illustrates information about the number of who visited carly Island of first visitors and backing visitors between 2000 and 2008
Overall,In 2000 The returning visitor's increase from 2500 to [redacted phone].when The first time visitors decrease between 8000 and 2002
Beginning With, The visited Carly island The first visitors rapidly high than returning visitor's.the first time visitors visited carly Island with 8000 visitors then after they visitor's decrease from 4000 in 2002.after in 2004 the first time visitors was high increase in 2002 and 2008 with[redacted phone] visitors.VOn the other hand, The visited carly in Island with returning visitor's first started with 2500 visitors in 2000 then after they fluctuate from 2000 to 2008.the returning visitor's increase 10000 in 2002 then after they visitor's was rapidly increasing [redacted phone] in 2004.the carly Island visitors of returning visitor's was decrease [redacted phone] to [redacted phone] in 2008
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to report the main features of the line graph, mentioning figures for both first-time and returning visitors such as starting at 8,000 and reaching 119,000. However, the data reported contains severe inaccuracies and contradicts typical trends for such data (e.g., jumping wildly between values like 137,000 and 145,000 without clear logical alignment to the prompt's visual). Furthermore, the length requirement has NOT been met: the response contains 145 words, falling 5 words short of the 150-word minimum. This under-length aspect negatively impacts the overall Task Achievement score. Consequently, the response earns a band score of 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of the response is extremely weak. Although the student attempts to use transition markers like 'Overall', 'Beginning With', and 'On the other hand', these devices are used incorrectly and mechanically. Paragraphing is highly fragmented and ineffective, with multiple sentences crammed into chaotic blocks without proper logical sequencing or progression. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow which data points are being compared. Overall, the structural arrangement fails to achieve a coherent overview, aligning with band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and plagued by severe word-choice and collocation errors. Phrases like 'backing visitors', 'the visited carly island', and 'rapidly high than' demonstrate a very limited command of English lexico-grammatical patterns. Spelling and word formation are heavily flawed ('provide illustrates', 'visitor's increase'). There are very few attempts at less common lexical items, and those that are attempted are used incorrectly, significantly straining the reader's comprehension and placing this performance firmly at a band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Almost all attempted complex sentences are severely flawed, ungrammatical, or structurally incomplete (e.g., 'when The first time visitors decrease between 8000 and 2002'). There is a near-total absence of accurate punctuation and capitalization. Verb tense consistency is entirely missing, with erratic shifts between past and present forms. Frequent, heavy errors distort meaning throughout the text, corresponding to a band score of 4.0.
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