Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graphs provide the information about the first time tourists and returning tourists number who visited the Caryl island over 8 years of period between 2000 to 2008.
Overall, initially the returning visitors was in minor majority while visitors who visited the island for the first time had a significant numbers but with passage of time returning visitors experienced a dramatic rise in their numbers.
At start in 2000 the returning visitors was in less numbers of approximately 3000 visitors while first time visitors at the same time was in twice and more numbers than the returning ones.significantly in 2002 the returning visitors had a unimaginable rise in their numbers till 2004 of total 12000 visitors as compare to first time visitors who suffers from unpredictable decline in their numbers falling to 4000 visitors .
Conversely in 2006 returning visitors still had a marginable rose in their numbers of 2000 new added returning visitors while the first time ones also expereinced a quick increase in their numbers from 4000 to 10000. At last in 2008 the returning visitors had a small plummet in their numbers where as the first time visitors still had a increase in their numbers but still less than the returning visitors number.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the line graph regarding first-time and returning visitors to Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008. The overview successfully captures the general trends, noting the initial differences and the subsequent dramatic rise in returning visitors. Key data points, such as the figures for 2000, 2004, 2006, and 2008, are appropriately selected and compared. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in reporting specific figures (such as the 2004 total for returning visitors), and the overall development tends to be slightly descriptive rather than fully analytical. Nevertheless, all major trends and comparisons are present, meeting the criteria for a Band 6.5 or solid 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently overall, with a clear attempt to structure the answer into an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs detailing the timeline. Cohesive devices are used to signal transitions, such as 'Overall', 'At start', 'Conversely', and 'At last'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes mechanical or awkward, and paragraphing is underdeveloped since the body text is grouped into dense blocks rather than distinct, logically separated years or trends. Furthermore, punctuation errors (such as missing spaces and periods) occasionally disrupt the logical flow between sentences. The organisation demonstrates an adequate framework, earning a Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'dramatic rise', 'unimaginable rise', 'unpredictable decline', and 'plummet'. However, many word choices and collocations are unnatural or inappropriate, such as 'minor majority', 'in twice and more numbers', 'marginable rose', and 'new added returning visitors'. There are also vocabulary errors that stem from literal translation or incorrect word forms. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, the noticeable inaccuracies in collocation and word formation place this firmly at a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting to connect clauses using relative pronouns and conjunctions. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the returning visitors was', 'visitors who visited... had a significant numbers'), incorrect prepositions, and awkward phrasing. Punctuation control is also weak, with missing spaces after commas and periods. Although these errors do not completely impede communication, their high frequency across most sentences prevents the score from reaching a Band 6.0.
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