Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph is represent average the visitors in island from 2000 to 2008.
An overall analysis shows that returning visitors was seen it's 2000 has recorded the highest average where as first time visitors showed lowest average of visitors.
At the onset of 2000, returning visitors was around about 3000, afterwards Sharp increase was seen it's consumption at 10000 visitors in 2002. Furthermore, slightly increase was seen it's consumption at 12000 visitors in 2004, and then Sharp increase was seen it's consumption at around about 15000 visitors in 2006. Afterwards showed that decreased the average near the 13000 visitors in 2008. In case of first time visitors was seen it's 2000 has recorded the 8000 visitors furthermore, Sharp decreased was seen it's consumption at 4000 visitors in 2002. Moreover, slightly increase was seen it's consumption at near the 12000 visitors in 2008.
Secondly, the Island visitors was first time average is low compared the returning visitors from 2000 to 2008
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, including the starting points, peaks, and final figures for both categories. However, the interpretation contains significant inaccuracies regarding the data points. For instance, the student states that returning visitors were around 3000 in 2000 and rose to 10000 in 2002, and mentions first-time visitors reaching nearly 12000 in 2008, which misreads the graphical information provided. Furthermore, the overview is weak, consisting of disconnected and confusing statements rather than a clear summary of overall trends. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The organizational structure of the response is flawed. The division into paragraphs is chaotic, with the body paragraph cluttered and difficult to follow due to a lack of clear progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repeatedly, such as the repetitive use of phrases like 'was seen it's consumption at'. Referencing is also confusing, making it hard to track whether the data refers to first-time or returning visitors. Although there is an attempt to structure an introduction, body, and conclusion, the poor logical flow and mechanical cohesion restrict the coherence to a band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the presence of basic paragraphing.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. The student repeatedly relies on inappropriate phrases like 'was seen it's consumption at', which does not make sense in the context of tourism data. There are also frequent word choice errors, such as 'average the visitors' instead of 'number of visitors'. While the response includes some task-related terms like 'visitors', 'increase', and 'decrease', the range is extremely limited and imprecise, and the frequent lexical errors impede communication. This performance aligns with the band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains frequent, severe errors in sentence structure, verb tenses, and agreement, such as 'The line graph is represent average the visitors' and 'returning visitors was seen it's 2000 has recorded'. There is a heavy reliance on passive constructions that are incorrectly formed and nonsensical ('was seen it's consumption at'). Simple sentences are prone to structural errors, and attempts at complex structures completely break down grammatically. This density of errors places the grammar firmly at a band 4.0 level.
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