Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This linegraph illustrates the numericals of tourist which had been traveled first time and repititively on the caryl island between the year 2000 to 2008.

Primary in the year of 2000 where 8000 new visitors had arrived whereas aprox 3000 people again visit the island. As time went popularity among the citizens had been affected and in the beggining of 2003 only 4000 new wonderer had saw that spot on opposite massive 10000 visitors again visited the same place. After that new population came to saw that place steadily possitively increased and in 2009 it reached total number of aprox 12000 but after 2005 returning visitora had been dicreased continusly. That indicated that caryl island is not that much in rravellers wishlist to visit it again.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student has attempted to summarise the line graph, identifying some main features such as the starting points and general trends for first-time and returning visitors. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the writer states that the population reached a total in 2009, yet the graph only covers the period from 2000 to 2008. Furthermore, critical details are missed, and the response is under-length, containing only 126 words compared to the minimum requirement of 150 words. This results in a clear penalty for under-length and incomplete development. Because parts of the data are misinterpreted and the word count falls short, the score reflects a partial handling of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into an introduction and a single large body paragraph, which is inadequate paragraphing for a proper report structure. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes mechanical or misused, as seen with phrases like 'Primary in the year of 2000' and 'As time went popularity'. There is a lack of clear progression, and referencing between sentences is occasionally confusing, making it difficult to follow the flow of information smoothly. While some basic time markers are attempted, the overall organisation remains disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained. The student relies on inaccurate word choices and flawed collocations, such as 'numericals of tourist', 'repititively', 'wonderer', 'new population came to saw that place', and 'rravellers wishlist'. Spelling errors are frequent ('aprox', 'beggining', 'possitively', 'dicreased', 'continusly'), and many words are formed incorrectly. This severely limits the range of vocabulary and places a heavy burden on the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mainly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain severe structural errors. Examples include 'which had been traveled first time', 'where 8000 new visitors had arrived whereas aprox 3000 people again visit', and 'had saw that spot on opposite massive 10000 visitors'. Tense consistency is poorly handled, shifting inappropriately between past and present forms. Frequent, dense errors in grammar and punctuation distort meaning and impede communication throughout the text.

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