Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates the new people's and returning visitors journey to and from caryl island in the era of 2000 to 2008.The new visitors arrival in the year of 2000 to 2002 are sudden fall of 4000 comers.But in the late periods of 2004 and 2006 there is consecutive increase in the first time visitors arrival and at 2008 shows a peak intake of fresh buddies.The red line elaborates the recovery period of visitors,which persue the gradual fall in the refusal of candidates from 2008 to 2000.At the end we could decide that the returning period shows step by step increase of people from caryl island and first time arrives peoples are non gradual but sometimes increases and decreases towards island in the time of 8 years .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to reach the minimum length requirement of 150 words, coming in at 129 words, which negatively impacts task achievement. Furthermore, while the writer attempts to describe trends such as the fall in visitors from 2000 to 2002 and the later increase, the data reporting is frequently confused and inaccurate. For instance, the text claims there was a 'sudden fall of 4000 comers' for new visitors between 2000 and 2002, and misinterprets the overall trajectory. There is no clear, comprehensive overview provided, and critical features of the graph are either omitted or inaccurately described. Because of the word count penalty and the significant inaccuracies in data representation, this falls into band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is written as a single, poorly structured paragraph, completely lacking appropriate paragraphing for an Academic Task 1 response. Progression of ideas is difficult to follow due to unnatural transitions such as 'At the end we could decide that...'. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and referencing is often unclear (for example, referring to visitors as 'fresh buddies' and confusing the direction of data). Overall, the information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent or logical manner suitable for an academic report, resulting in a band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the response is largely informal, inappropriate, and sometimes incomprehensible for an academic task. Examples include 'new people's', 'comers', 'fresh buddies', and 'refusal of candidates', which demonstrate a severe lack of awareness of academic register and collocation. There are also noticeable word choice errors and unnatural phrases that impede communication. While the writer attempts to use descriptive terms, the limited and inaccurate range places this at a band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that frequently cause difficulty for the reader. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as in 'The new visitors arrival in the year of 2000 to 2002 are sudden fall' and 'which persue the gradual fall'. Sentence structures are basic or awkwardly constructed, and the attempts at complex sentences result in ungrammatical formulations. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic. These persistent errors across most sentences limit the grammar score to a band 4.0.

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