Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of first time tourists and returning visitors who wnet to Caryl Island between 2000 and 2008.
Overall, the number of revisting tourists were higher than the number of first time visiting the place for time period. Despite the decline at the begining the number of vistors who were first-time eventually rose later however it did not overtake the returnning vistors for 8 years.In contrast, the number of returning vistors were at uptrend but had slight downward trend at the end.
The number of first time tourist in Caryl Island at the beginning were 8,000 which fell by half of it to 4,000 in 2002 , eventually to bounce back and reach its highest point at around 12,000 in 8 years.
Inspite of, starting from around 3,000 in 2000 were the ones who return to the Island. Furthermore, it experince a dramactic increase of more than 7,000 for 2002 even surpased the first time tourist and became top. Addition, it reached its peak at approximately 15,000 to decline at last for 13,000 in 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and trends of both visitor categories from 2000 to 2008. A clear overall trend is provided in the second paragraph, noting that returning visitors were generally higher than first-time visitors for the period. Key data points are accurately cited, such as first-time visitors starting at 8,000, dropping to 4,000 in 2002, and reaching about 12,000 at the end, while returning visitors peaked around 15,000 in 2006. However, there are minor misinterpretations of data details, such as stating that returning visitors started at around 3,000 in 2000 (which is accurate) but phrasing some comparisons slightly awkwardly. Overall, the information is well selected and supported by the visual data, satisfying the requirements for a Band 6.5 or solid Band 6, rounded to 6.5 for good feature coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is divided into four paragraphs, following a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the specific data series. Cohesive devices are used throughout, such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', and 'Addition'. However, some cohesive links are mechanically used or grammatically awkward, for instance, 'Addition' instead of 'In addition', and 'Inspite of, starting from around 3,000 in 2000 were the ones who return to the Island' which creates a disjointed sentence structure. Paragraphing is logical, separating the overview from the detailed body paragraphs. Referencing is generally clear, though occasional clumsy transitions prevent the text from achieving a higher band. Cohesion is adequate for a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting less common items such as 'uptrend', 'dramactic' (dramatic), and 'surpased' (surpassed). However, there are several noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'wnet' instead of 'went', 'revisting' instead of 'revisiting', 'begining' instead of 'beginning', 'vistors' instead of 'visitors', and 'returnning' instead of 'returning'. These errors do not impede communication as the meaning remains clear, but they restrict the lexical score. Phrasing like 'became top' is also overly informal for an Academic Task 1 response. The vocabulary used is sufficient for a Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'Despite the decline at the begining the number of vistors who were first-time eventually rose later however it did not overtake the returnning vistors for 8 years.' There are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues, including run-on sentences lacking commas, missing auxiliary verbs ('the number of revisting tourists were higher', 'the number of returning vistors were at uptrend'), and incorrect prepositional usage ('for 8 years', 'at last for 13,000'). Furthermore, sentence fragments like 'Inspite of, starting from around 3,000 in 2000 were the ones who return to the Island' demonstrate weak syntactic control over complex structures. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar performance firmly at Band 5.5.
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