Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line grpah illustrates the number of first time visitors and returning visitors was visited in caryl island in 2000 from 2008.
overall, the first time visitor was decrease in 2002 and returning visitors was rapidly increase in 2006.
The first time visitors was 8000 in 2000 and rapidly decrease in 2002. futheremore, returning visitors was 3000 in 2000 and rapidly increased in 10000 in 2002. moreover , in the 2004 ,first time visitors was travel in 2004 drecrease near about 6000 as cpmpared to returning visitors .
the first time visitors was increased 9000 in 2006 as compared to 2004 On the other hand, Returning visitors was streamly increased in near about 15000 in 2006 .the fist time visitors was rapidly decrease 14000 in 2008 and retuning visitors was increased in 2008 near about 11000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 136 words. Content-wise, the student attempts to report on the main features of the line graph, noting figures for both first-time and returning visitors in 2000, 2002, 2004, 2006, and 2008. However, there are numerous inaccurate figures reported (for instance, claiming that returning visitors reached 10,000 in 2002 when it was actually first-time visitors that dropped, or stating 'first time visitors was rapidly decrease 14000 in 2008' which misreads both the data and the values). The overview is extremely brief and lacks a clear synthesis of the overall trends. Because of the under-length penalty and significant data inaccuracies, this falls into band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall progression is disjointed. There is an attempt to sequence information chronologically, but sentences are frequently fragmented or clumped together awkwardly (e.g., 'moreover , in the 2004 ,first time visitors was travel in 2004'). Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive manner ('furthermore', 'moreover', 'on the other hand'), and referencing is often unclear, making the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Paragraphing is rudimentary and does not logically separate distinct analytical points. This performance aligns with band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple verbs like 'was', 'increase', and 'decrease'. There are frequent errors in word choice, form, and collocation, such as 'streamly increased' instead of 'sharply increased', and awkward phrasing like 'first time visitors was travel'. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'grph' (in the prompt/text), 'futheremore', 'drecrease', and 'retuning'. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a precise academic summary. This corresponds to a band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex structures result in severe grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement failures ('the first time visitor was decrease') and incorrect verb forms ('was visited in caryl island', 'visitors was travel'). Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic throughout the text (e.g., missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences, irregular spacing around commas). Frequent errors impede communication and obscure the intended meaning. This is indicative of band 4.0.
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