Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of visitors who visited caryl island for the first time and returned between 2000 and 2008
overall , the number of visitors decreased initally but started increase over the period. whereas , at started visitors were returned, while the number of returned visitors decreased by the end of the period.
In 2000, 8,000 people visited caryl island , compared to around 3,000 people who returned . However , the number of visitors fell dramatically in 2002 , thus the amount of returned visitors surge significantly to 10,000. after 2002 , both figure increased rapidly.
Moving further, in 2004 , both figure had huge difference. therefore, the number of visitors inclined by 6,000 , compared to 12,000 returned people almost doubled of visitors. in addition, in 2006 , the number of visitors returned from caryl island was at its peak with around 15,000 . while 10,000 visitors visited caryl island at that time. In 2008, the number of returned visitors decresed slightly to around 13,500. in contast, the number of first time visitors was about 12,000
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the line graph regarding first-time and returning visitors to Caryl Island, presenting an overview and some key data points such as the peak in 2006. However, the task is only partially addressed because some interpretations of the data are confused or inaccurate. For instance, the writer states that visitors decreased initially but started increasing overall, which is somewhat too general, and misinterprets the data figures in several places, such as claiming that returned visitors decreased by the end of the period when they actually fluctuated or that 12,000 was 'almost doubled of visitors' in an unclear comparison. Key trends are presented with limited expansion, placing the response at this level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text demonstrates some overall organisation with paragraphs attempting to separate different years or trends, but there is no clear overall progression due to confusing transitions and mechanical use of cohesive devices like 'Moving further' and 'therefore'. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as ambiguous pronoun usage and mixing up first-time and returning visitor categories ('the number of visitors returned from caryl island'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal logic within paragraphs is often disrupted by abrupt shifts in data reporting. To improve, the writer needs to ensure logical sequencing and clearer signposting of relationships between data points.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The lexical range is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic data concepts, using words like 'dramatically', 'surge', and 'peak'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form that cause some difficulty for the reader, such as 'inclined' instead of 'increased', 'returned people', and 'decresed'. Spelling errors like 'initally', 'contast', and 'decresed' also appear. While the vocabulary attempts to describe trends, the frequent inaccuracies in collocation and word choice restrict the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer uses a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors including missing capitalization ('caryl island'), punctuation errors (missing full stops, unspaced commas), subject-verb agreement issues ('both figure increased'), and incorrect prepositional usage. For example, 'at started visitors were returned' is ungrammatical. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted control over sentence structures and basic grammatical rules.
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