Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph shows us the number of visitors who visited caryl island first time from 2000 to 2008 years and numbers in 2000 to 16000.
on the one hand the first time visitors who visit caryl island in 2000 and the number of people is 8000 and and it decline to 2002 with only 4000 people . in addition, the again increase in 2008 with 12000 peoples.
further looking returning visitors in 2000 with 3000 people and and inclimed in 2002 with 10000 people. and flastruction then 2008 with 14000 people . returning from caryi island.
overlook the line graph shows that the first time visitors are increased and further looking the returning visitors from caryi island is flastructure.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response achieves a minimal overview of the line graph, but it fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 120 words. While the writer attempts to report data points for both first-time and returning visitors, the information provided is patchy, poorly structured, and contains numerous inaccurate figures when compared to the source chart. For example, the text states the numbers in 2000 reached 16000, which is incorrect. Furthermore, comparisons are vague and inadequately developed, reflecting a minimal engagement with the source visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates an attempt to structure the writing into paragraphs, but the overall organization and progression are weak. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as repetitive and misused transitional phrases like 'on the one hand', 'further looking', and 'overlook'. There is a lack of clear logical sequencing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information across the years. Referencing is also faulty, and paragraphing is arbitrary rather than serving a clear functional purpose.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical and mechanical errors that strain the reader's understanding. There are notable word-choice and spelling errors, such as 'decline' used incorrectly as a noun/verb form clash ('it decline'), 'inclimed' instead of climbed, and 'flastruction' or 'flastructure' instead of fluctuation. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for a precise discussion of statistical trends, heavily impacting the effectiveness of communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on basic, faulty sentence structures. Frequent errors occur across verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. Examples of grammatical breakdown include 'who visited caryl island first time' and 'the again increase in 2008 with 12000 peoples', where plural forms and article usage are incorrect. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with irregular spacing and capitalization throughout. These frequent errors impede communication and place the grammar firmly at a lower level.
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