Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph highlights the number of new comer tourists as well as the returning visitors to an island between the year 2000 and 2008.
Overall, the pattern on first time visitors has seen a steady rise in most of the years whereas the visitors who visitied the island more than ones has incrreased massively till the end of the period.
Firstly, we can see that the number of first comer tourist was only around 8000 during the starting of the year which saw a decline for two years to reach its lowest number of 4000 in the year 2002.Then after the numbers of visitor kept on increasing till it hit its highest number of 12000 in the year 2008.
Moreover, despite having lowest number initially, the number of returning visitors sky rocketed to its peak number of 15000 in the year 2006.HOwever during the last years it saw a slight declline of 6000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
You identify both visitor groups and cover the full period, with relevant details such as first-time visitors falling from about 8,000 to 4,000 in 2002 and returning visitors reaching roughly 15,000 in 2006. The overview also recognises the broad upward movement, so the main features are addressed. However, it is not fully accurate: first-time visitors peak at about 11,800 in 2008, not 12,000 exactly (a reasonable approximation), while returning visitors fall from around 15,200 to 13,400—a decline of about 1,800, not 6,000. The overview’s claim that returning visitors increased “till the end” misses this final fall. To strengthen the response, make the overview more precise and compare the two series at the end of the period.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing each visitor group. Sequencing expressions such as “Overall,” “Firstly,” and “Moreover” help the reader follow the account, and the main trends are presented in a sensible order. This gives the report a coherent structure. Some linking is mechanical, however, and the final paragraph’s “However” introduces a contrast without clearly stating the comparison or the size of the change. The overview also groups the trends in a way that obscures the returning visitors’ late decline. For stronger progression, connect the two series directly where useful and use referencing and transitions to clarify how each period relates to the overall pattern.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use a range of relevant terms, including “decline,” “lowest,” “increasing,” and “peak,” which helps describe movement in the graph. However, several choices are inaccurate, informal, or awkward for an academic report: “new comer tourists,” “first comer tourist,” “sky rocketed,” and “peak number” are not natural descriptions here. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “visitied,” “incrreased,” “HOwever,” and “declline.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but they reduce precision and control. Aim for consistent, standard terms such as “first-time visitors” and “returning visitors,” and use neutral trend language such as “rose sharply” or “reached a peak.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “despite having lowest number initially” and the sentence describing the fall in 2002 followed by a rise. The overall meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. In “the pattern on first time visitors has seen,” the construction is awkward; “the number of first-time visitors showed” would be clearer. “The number of returning visitors sky rocketed” also needs agreement with the singular subject, and “during the starting of the year” is not a well-formed time expression. Several sentences run together after full stops, as in “2002.Then” and “2006.HOwever.” Use accurate sentence boundaries, articles, and verb forms, while retaining a mix of sentence structures.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.
