Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph display information about how many tourist visit Caryl Land first time and returning visitors between 2000 and 2008

Overall,when we see line graph steadly went up from start till 2006, However its a slightly a decline after 2006 to 2008. On otherhand first time visitors a opposite to the returning vistors in 2000 its a great start but in two year a decline in tourist number then a great comeback and number of visitors incresed every year till 2008.

First of all if we disscused about the returning visitors from 2000 the number start approximately 3000 vistors and incresead to 10000 vistors till 2002 then only 2000 visitor more in next two year, then a decline near 2006 from above the 14000 vistor to under 14000 vistor till 2008.

On the otherhand when we get information from the graph in start of 2000, Almost 8000 person visit the Island the a huge downfall in next two year and total number went to 4000 almost half. then a dramtically rose of visitiors after 2002 and this rise went till 2008 stright.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both visitor groups and identify the main patterns: returning visitors rise overall before falling slightly, while first-time visitors drop early and then recover. Several figures are also reported accurately, including about 3,000 and 10,000 returning visitors in 2000 and 2002, and the fall from roughly 8,000 to 4,000 first-time visitors. However, the overview is not fully clear: “steadly went up from start till 2006” refers to returning visitors but does not name the series, and the first-time trend is described without its final level. The account also omits the important comparison that returning visitors remain higher from 2002 onward. Make the overview more precise and select a few key comparisons to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for the two visitor categories. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information. However, progression is weakened by unclear references such as “its” and “this rise,” which make it difficult to identify the series being discussed. Linking phrases are also repetitive: “On otherhand” appears more than once, while “First of all” does not add much to the data description. Some sentences run several trends together, particularly in the overview. Use clear topic sentences naming each visitor group, and connect comparisons directly—for example, explain when returning visitors overtake first-time visitors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “decline,” “increased,” “downfall” and “rose,” so the main movements can usually be understood. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “a great comeback,” “a great start” and “stright.” Repeated use of “visitors” and “number” also makes the account less precise. Some expressions are not natural for an academic graph summary, including “get information from the graph” and “a huge downfall.” Aim for accurate trend language and vary it selectively; for instance, describe figures as rising, falling, reaching a peak or recovering, rather than relying on general or conversational phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can generally follow the broad trends. However, errors in sentence construction and basic grammar are noticeable, especially in longer clauses. For example, “The graph display information” has subject–verb disagreement, while “in start of 2000, Almost 8000 person visit” has problems with articles, number agreement and tense. Several sentences are joined without clear punctuation, as in the final paragraph, and the overview contains an incomplete or unclear construction: “first time visitors a opposite.” These issues sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use past tense consistently for the historical data, and check punctuation when joining clauses.

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