Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Academic Practice Accelerator · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This Line Graph features the caryl Island visitors both the first time visitors and returning visitors between 2000 and 2008.

If we talk generally, In 2000 the number of first time visitors is greater than the number of visitors who are returning from the Island, but the data shows that in 2008 the figures changes. The number of returning visitors takes lead and leave behind the figure of visitors who are visiting for the first time.

The figure of first time visitors was at 8000 in 2000 which fell dramatically down to the half in one year. in the next year again the numbers started to increase over the years and reached to the almost 12000 in 2008.

In 2000, the number of returning visitors was at 3000 but it makes a significant progress in the next year and hit the value of 10000 almost thrice of the numbers in starting year. But the ending of the line graph shows that in the last year the numbers get down to [redacted phone] from 15000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two visitor groups and report several key figures, including 8,000 first-time visitors and 3,000 returning visitors in 2000, followed by a rise in returning visitors. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: you say returning visitors take the lead in 2008, whereas first-time visitors are still lower, at about 11,800 compared with 13,400 returning visitors—so this comparison is correct, but the earlier statement that first-time visitors lead in 2000 is also correct. More importantly, the account omits the first-time visitors’ fall to 4,000 in 2002 and the returning series’ peak around 15,200 in 2006. The final figure is misreported as “135000 from 15000.” Select the main turning points and describe them accurately to make the summary more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, a general comparison, and separate descriptions of the two visitor groups. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “In 2000” and “in the next year” help indicate time. However, progression is limited because the overview and detail paragraphs repeat comparisons without clearly organising the main trends. The phrase “If we talk generally” does not introduce a precise overview, while “But the ending of the line graph” makes the final point feel abrupt. Some references, such as “the figures” and “the numbers,” are vague. Grouping each series’ changes in chronological order and using clearer links such as “By 2006” and “thereafter” would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “fell,” “increase,” “reached,” and “significant progress,” so the reader can generally understand the trends you intend to report. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural. “The number … takes lead” and “leave behind the figure” are not suitable collocations for comparing data, while “hit the value” is informal. “The numbers get down” is also imprecise, and “135000” creates a serious numerical-reading problem; the intended figure appears to be about 13,400. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “rose to,” “declined to,” “peaked at,” and “stood at,” and check that figures are written clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer sentences, for example, “The number of returning visitors takes lead and leave behind the figure…,” but control is inconsistent, and many sentences rely on simple patterns. Errors in tense and agreement occur in “the figures changes,” “the numbers started,” and “it makes a significant progress.” The sentence beginning “The figure of first time visitors was at 8000” also has awkward grammatical construction, and sentence boundaries and capitalisation are inconsistent, as in “in the next year” after a full stop. These errors sometimes make the intended timeline or comparison harder to follow. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build longer sentences around clear clauses, while checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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