Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This line garph illustrates the number of the first visitors and returning visitors CARYL ISLAND over a 8 year duration betwen [redacted phone].

Overall, the two groups of visitors followd opposite side throught the period.the number of first time visitors experience overall decline and the number of returning visitors sadun fall and then significant increase.

in 2000, the number of people visiting caryl island for the first time at 8000 this number increase suddenly over the next year at reaching 12000 in 2002. the number drop to appromately 7000 in 2004 decrease further to 4000 in 2006 and eventully period start low 2000 by 2008

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the two visitor groups and attempts an overview, but the main trends are not reported accurately. The overview says first-time visitors declined overall, although they rise from about 4,000 in 2002 to nearly 12,000 in 2008; it also reverses the returning-visitors trend. Several figures are assigned to the wrong years or series: first-time visitors were about 8,000 in 2000 and 4,000 in 2002, not 12,000 in 2002, while returning visitors rose from about 3,000 to 15,200 by 2006. The account ends unfinished at “In,” leaving the second series largely undescribed. The response is also 44 words below the required minimum. To improve, give a correct overview and cover both lines with selected, accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a paragraph with figures. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression is disrupted by unclear and contradictory statements, such as “followd opposite side” and the claim that first-time visitors declined despite the later figures described. The final standalone “In” makes the response feel abruptly unfinished, and there is no developed comparison of the two groups. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect each year’s figures in a clear sequence. Simple links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile” would help show how the trends relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “first time visitors,” “returning visitors,” “overall decline,” and “increase,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the meaning difficult to follow: “followd opposite side,” “sadun fall,” and “period start low 2000” do not communicate the intended trends clearly. Spelling errors such as “garph,” “betwen,” “appromately,” and “eventully” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, conventional language for describing graphs rather than forcing unfamiliar phrases. For example, use “fluctuated,” “rose sharply,” or “reached a peak” where these accurately describe the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts connected sentences and uses some time references, but control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, “in 2000, the number of people visiting caryl island for the first time at 8000” is missing a main verb, while “this number increase suddenly” has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “the number drop” then strings several changes together without clear punctuation or grammatical links. Capitalisation and sentence boundaries are also unreliable, particularly after “period.” To improve, build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, use past-tense forms consistently for the historical data, and separate each major change with appropriate punctuation.

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